Pieceofdam Posted November 22, 2017 Share Posted November 22, 2017 Hi everyone, I wrote some lyrics a couple months and I would like to share it with you guys. I've always dreamt about Britney singing these kind of lyrics. Hope you'll like it et don't be too rude . I took the evening train and I think about you I’m elsewhere, I’m gone You’re everywhere in my escape, everywhere in my escape I write to you in the dark night Without regret and without remorse An enraged horde tracks me and wants my skin I escaped, I wait for the punishment From the bottom of my escape Chorus One day, I’ll be back in the center of the light Head up, I’ll take the place I left during my escape The time of my escape Better be lost than be found I’ve done too much to be happy way to much to forget From the bottom of my escape From the bottom of my escape Don’t blame me too much the rumor is terrible Much more terrible than me I hear them from here saying anything and everything From the bottom of my escape From the bottom of my escape CHORUS Bridge It’s not saddness, it’s hate Some ink blood in the veins I’m not afraid of being caught I’m in love wherever I am, here and there You stay in the bottom of me escape CHORUS x2 Link to comment
redacted statement Posted November 22, 2017 Share Posted November 22, 2017 17 minutes ago, Pieceofdam said: An enraged horde tracks me and wants my skin I quite like it though the skin part sounds a bit weird. Wouldn't "hide" be better? hide hʌɪd/ noun noun: hide; plural noun: hides the skin of an animal, especially when tanned or dressed. in case you didn't know! Link to comment
BritneyJeanSpearsOfficial Posted November 22, 2017 Share Posted November 22, 2017 I like your direction but I think it needs a little bit more work and then after that, we pussypopping all night, til sunrise I also wrote lyrics. At the beginning my writing needed work now it getting there (COPYRIGHT you guys can't use this only me and when I release this as my single) it's called "The One" I still need to finish it but I really like it so does my friend and shes\'s a hard critic Part of 1st Verse "...Dare to say “you are a god” Hiding in the dark Afraid to be seen by some Chorus You are the one My life, my dream, my love You are the one That I sing this song You are the oooone You are the oooone You are the one You’re the reason why love isn’t gone 2 Verse Who needs *****? When I have the scent of your lust My addiction is growing strong And I just can't get enough You’re the one that I dream all day and night I can't be pleased..." Now I just need to finish Link to comment
Pieceofdam Posted November 22, 2017 Author Share Posted November 22, 2017 38 minutes ago, BritneyJeanSpearsOfficial said: I like your direction but I think it needs a little bit more work and then after that, we pussypopping all night, til sunrise I also wrote lyrics. At the beginning my writing needed work now it getting there (COPYRIGHT you guys can't use this only me and when I release this as my single) it's called "The One" I still need to finish it but I really like it so does my friend and shes\'s a hard critic Part of 1st Verse "...Dare to say “you are a god” Hiding in the dark Afraid to be seen by some Chorus You are the one My life, my dream, my love You are the one That I sing this song You are the oooone You are the oooone You are the one You’re the reason why love isn’t gone 2 Verse Who needs *****? When I have the scent of your lust My addiction is growing strong And I just can't get enough You’re the one that I dream all day and night I can't be pleased..." Now I just need to finish I like it! Keep going! Link to comment
Pieceofdam Posted November 22, 2017 Author Share Posted November 22, 2017 44 minutes ago, I Always Sing Live said: I quite like it though the skin part sounds a bit weird. Wouldn't "hide" be better? hide hʌɪd/ noun noun: hide; plural noun: hides the skin of an animal, especially when tanned or dressed. in case you didn't know! Yeah, I think it sounds better! I'm french so I don't know every word! Oops :p Link to comment
none Posted November 22, 2017 Share Posted November 22, 2017 I can imagine it sounding like If I'm Dancing/Trip To Your Heart/ Til It's Gone Link to comment
BraveGraphics Posted November 23, 2017 Share Posted November 23, 2017 It is a bit dark I like it Link to comment
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